下面小编跟大家一起了解雅思G类小作文真题6分范文分析，希望对大家的学习有所帮助。
You recently went to a concert and though one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel.
Write a letter to the singer. In your letter:
-say how you feel about his performance
-give details of your musical activities
-explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
考官评语：考生回应了3个问题，但是观点可以进一步拓展。行文较为流畅，但是应进行分段。词汇丰富，使用了非常用词，如lyrics, insight，拼写和词性错误很少，如greatful应该是grateful，detial应该是detailed，如果使用更多话题相关词汇会提高LR分数，如用performance替换the play。使用了简单句和复杂句，较为准确，但存在句子成分丢失的问题，如our drama and musical team (would obtain) a deeper connection to the song.
Dear Mr. Tremain,
I saw your concert recently at Manchester Hall and I thought your perfomance was very touching and excellent. I felt deeply connectd with the lyrics in your songs. I am a current music student at Oxford university and our school is having a musical performance next week. The play relates well to your latest song and I would be very greatful if you can help with me musical activities by providing a more detail insight to your lyric. Also, could you give us some tips about performing as this is our first performance. By giving an insight to your lyric, our drama and musical team a deeper connection to the song, which is what we really need. I hope I am not asking for too much. My team really looks up to you and it would mean the world if you write back.
Thank You for reading this letter and I hope to hear from you soon.
Yours Sincerly,
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组长解析：如考官评语所说，这篇作文没有分段，结构不清晰，组长建议分段如下文所示。此外，这篇作文涉及一些与音乐、演出有关的基础词汇，大家注意学习积累。
I saw your concert recently at Manchester Hall and I thought your perfomance was very touching and excellent. I felt deeply connectd with the lyrics in your songs.

I am a current music student at Oxford university and our school is having a musical performance next week. The play relates well to your latest song and I would be very greatful if you can help with me musical activities by providing a more detail insight to your lyric.
Also, could you give us some tips about performing as this is our first performance. By giving an insight to your lyric, our drama and musical team a deeper connection to the song, which is what we really need.
I hope I am not asking for too much. My team really looks up to you and it would mean the world if you write back.
Thank You for reading this letter and I hope to hear from you soon.