小编在看到很多小烤鸭有这样的疑问:“考了三遍
雅思,写作还是6分。雅思写作到底有什么高分技巧?”今天小编就来给被雅思写作绊住脚的小烤鸭们答疑解惑!
在这里分享两个雅思写作高分技巧:
①对题目关键词进行同义转换
②将核心观点的关键词在举例中具体化
以剑10 test 1 task 2题目和考官范文为例,题目如下:
It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at anearly age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagreewith this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?
我们看到 考官范文的后面一自然段 ,针对第二个问题的回答,也就是讨论哪些惩罚方法可以使用。
Rather, teachers and parents can use avariety of methods to discip line theiryoung charges, such as detentio n , w ithdrawal of privileges, and time-out . Making the punish ment fit the crime is a useful notion, which would see children being made to pick up rubbish they have dropped, clean up graffiti they have drawn, or apologize to someone they have hurt. In these ways responsibility is developed in the child, which leads to much better future behavior than does punishment.
第 一句话,核心是说明其实有很多方法可以用来惩罚孩子。 题目中的名词 punishment变成了discipline sb, 动词短语表示处罚某人。题目中的 children变成了young charges ,表示年轻的受照料者们,也就是小孩的意思。通过 使用近义词对题中的两处关键词进行同义转换 ,体现了词汇的多样性。 光说有很多方法很空洞,于是在句末 列举了三个小例子 :detention, withdrawal of privileges, withdrawal of time-out(意思分别是留堂、取消特权、取消休息时间),使用了下义词对punishment进行同义转换和进一步细化。
第二句话,考官提出了一个 核心观点 :应该让惩罚与罪行相适应(making the punishment fit the crime)。接下来就是 对核心观点进行举例论证, 这个拓展方式很多同学都会用,但是经常会出现的情况是举的例子和核心观点不是对应,或是举例中有很多多余的细节,反而跟核心观点对应的部分只提了几个词。然而 在高分写法中,举例应该是对核心观点进行具体化, 比如核心观点中的crime和punishment,对应到例子中是drop the rubbish和pick up rubbish,draw graffiti和clean up graffiti,hurt someone和apologize to someone,共三个例子,每个例子中都能体现核心观点的关键词,整体意思上也和观点句吻合。 这样的写法可以避免举例无证观点的情况,而且对观点进行了直接的拓展具体化,高分无疑。 以上在雅思写作中也是有效的。只不过它们只是“衔接机制”的一种而已。
更多、更高级的衔接还有:
(1) 短语。本质上与词汇相同,但更灵活。常用的有类似“due to”, “now that”, “in contrast”等。使用短语还另有好处,它要求你将前面已述的内容再做一次简练的归纳,然后再引出后文论述。这有助于文章连贯性、完整性的体现。 大家可根据自身情况进行衔接语汇积累,购买相应的书籍查阅,还可有意识地选择一些作为你的“常用”语料 。
(2) 代词。写作时往往不需用词汇来提示衔接关系,只需用代词开始下句话即可。 例如 “Recreational activities are crucial to the well-being of modern citizens under pressure. They serve as outlets of unsatisfactory moods and refill residents' energy tanks.”
(3) 从句。往往用衔接词连起来的句子也可以用一个简单的定语从句或状语从句连接。这样做可以展示你对语言的控制力,也很有效地丰富了语法。具体区别请看下面一个例子: 例 用衔接词,两句话: Political decay is part of the evolution of authoritative powers. Moreover, it exists in the histories of almost all countries. 用从句,一句话: Political decay is part of the evolution of authoritative powers, which admittedly exists in the histories of almost all countries.
希望各位小烤鸭再也不用愁雅思写作!