雅思备考,不知道大家对于考试准备的怎么样了呢?下面小编整理了一些雅思G类小作文真题6分范文及考官评语。大家一起来学习吧。
注:原文搬运,保留了所有错误。
Dear Mr Smith,
The purpose of this letter is to expose my interest of working during half year in the company's head office.
Firstly, I would like to mention that I have developed efficiently my. Additionally I have performed accurately the role that I have been doing over the last years. Consequently, I would like to learn about other areas in the comany, and I would appreciate the opportunity of being involved in new challeges.
If that could be possible, I would like to train my assistant. She could develope the tasks that I have been doing as well as me. Moreover, I can confide un her. She has a wide knowledge and the capability to develop any task related to my job. Not only she could do my job but also she could have my advice at any time that it would be recquired.
I would enormuusly appreciate if you could have the possibility of arrange overseas my trans Ference to the head office in the company.
Your sincerelly

考官评语:6分。回应了三个问题,但不够充分,每个都可以拓展。语气使用恰当,写信目的清晰。内容连贯,使用了各种连接词,如Firstly, Additionally, Consequently。词汇充足但是存在用词不准确问题,如expose应为 express, trans Ference应为transfer,还有一些拼写错误,如develope, recquired,enormuusly, sincerelly,这些错误没有影响理解。使用了各种简单和复杂的句子结构,语法和标点方面都有错误,不影响理解。达到6 需要进一步拓展主要内容,使用更丰富的词汇和语法。
组长补充:这篇作文小错误较多,包括拼写、用词和语法;信息给的太泛,应提供一些与具体的职业有关的内容,这类题目建议大家都结合自己或自己熟悉的职业去给出更多信息,这样既提升了内容,又会使用到一些行业内的专用语,提升词汇表现。